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Post by buttonpresser4815 on Oct 28, 2006 23:14:07 GMT -5
I have just completed my first actual story! I started and finished it today, it is only two pages on Word, 12 font single spaced. I am so happy though! If anyone wants to read it I shall PM it to them. If you do read it, tell me what you think in this thread, but remember.. use a spoiler tag! |
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Post by Jarlaxle on Oct 29, 2006 11:57:24 GMT -5
Could you PM me a copy? I'm curious as to what you have.
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Post by buttonpresser4815 on Oct 29, 2006 12:04:52 GMT -5
Check your messages. I have another coming up. I think i might become a Soft science fiction writer. |
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Post by Jarlaxle on Oct 29, 2006 12:26:55 GMT -5
It would be challenging but it would suit you. Your work is impressive. I had no idea that it was a computer until the end. You gave hints away but like a skilled author, you made sure not to give away too much so that you only came to the realization that he was a part of the computer at the end. I liked this idea, and your writing style is impressive. My only complaint is that sometimes you refer to the main character as "him" and sometimes as "I". Its usually one or the other. Is this just a short story or is it the beginnings of something bigger?
Soft Si Fi would be a good area to explore, you can use your imagination for it.
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Post by buttonpresser4815 on Oct 29, 2006 12:54:37 GMT -5
OH i was trying to revert the "I"s to "He"s but i knew i would miss a few. I normally use I in stories but changed it this time. Thanks for the comments, but wrap it in spoiler tags! Im not sure. Im thinking about writing about a maximum of 20 pages each for all these ideas i have for stories and getting them in a big anthology. I cant write a whole novel..but id end up having a bunch of unrelated stories that would add up to at least a hundred pages. My onle hope is that, if it is somehow published, that the readers dont get too attached to the main characters, because they are commonly, eliminated. Look forward to my next softscifistory...here is a summary. Artificial World-Artificial Man For his whole life, he has lived in the confines of a toxin free biosphere. The artificial environment is free of waste, of pollution, of any worries at all. But, after the organization funding the biosphere is no longer able to support it, they must release the child into the Earth. They struggle to part with their subject, as he struggles to adapt to the many dangers of the world, and fails to comprehend evil and cannot withstand any temperature below 50 degrees. He struggles to understand the emotions of human creatures, and befriend at least one of them. This story will detail it all.
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Post by Jarlaxle on Oct 29, 2006 20:38:14 GMT -5
So just a book with a whole bunch of little stories. That's not a bad idea. I have 2 books that work in the same way, but I have yet to read them. I had a feeling after I made that last post that perhaps you used I and he on purpose, but at the time I thought it was an error. Interesting method to use, I don't remember anyone else using it before.
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Post by buttonpresser4815 on Oct 30, 2006 16:18:28 GMT -5
No, it is an error, its just in most of the stories i write i use I, but i used he this time and hada tough time adjusting.
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Post by Jarlaxle on Oct 31, 2006 14:04:30 GMT -5
Oh. Well if you can I'd like to see the revised version of the story. Have any other projects your working on.
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Post by buttonpresser4815 on Nov 3, 2006 23:26:53 GMT -5
Im about half done with AWAM. Ill have it finished by tomorrow night. I dont have very much knoweldge on Biodomes, so theres not much technical information about it..
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Post by Jarlaxle on Nov 3, 2006 23:44:25 GMT -5
I wouldn't know if your information on bio domes would be accurate anyway, I know probably less then you do about them. If you can by tomorrow, do send that story to me, I'm anxious to see what you have now, my time here is over, I'll be back tomorrow.
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Post by buttonpresser4815 on Nov 10, 2006 15:48:29 GMT -5
I am finally finished with AWAM..it might be too big for one pm though ill get it to you regardless...Dont be surprised when you see your new messages count when you get back...its all me. Read them in reverse order excpet for the first one.
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Post by Jarlaxle on Nov 11, 2006 1:02:54 GMT -5
HOLY CRAP! That took me an hour to read! (I'm not a fast reader I know.) It was worth it though. That was very impressive TMP. This only confirms my earlier theory that you have a lot of writing potential. It was very insightful. Composition with messages like that seem to be your strong suit.
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